Thursday, March 14, 2024

ARE WE READY TO RUMBLE?!?!?!?!?!?!

     Guess who FINALLY finished their completed their full short film outline? Yeah me obviously. So today in class I just kind of locked in and everything clicked. So here is my outline:


    Slow fade in, slow tracking forward showing mom on the couch, room is dark, tv is loudly playing sound. Close up on broken bottle on the floor, empty bottles, mom looking at the tv with a empty stare. Door opens, MC walkings in, setting His backpack on the floor. Mom sees, but turns back to the screen. “heeeyyyyy honey! How was school? (stress on school, downwards intonation).” He looks at the living room where his mom is, and turns away from his mother “s’fine” (it’s fine, but words are meshed together). Cut back to mom, she takes another sip, glances back at her son, and glances back to the tv screen “(mumbled with disinterest) alright then”. The boy opens a pizza box to find it empty, then resolves to get a granola bar or just something simple, and heads to his  room.

    He gets to his room, and begins to do homework on his desk, when suddenly something catches her attention out of the corner of her eye. Cut to a close up focused on a note, focus shifts to the boy again, confused, picks up the notes and reads it. The note is one that his brother wrote to him a year ago, encouraging him to do well on his math test, and signed with his name. His heart races with the memory but he sets it back down in a drawer and shuts it. Out of sight out of mind, he isn’t going to let this misplaced note bring him back to confront his grief. He opens his computer to distract himself with his homework; transition to school. He makes his way into the cafeteria getting bumps on the way to where he sits alone, having isolated himself from several of his friends. He opens his lunch box and finds more notes in there. The first is another previous one, and there are two more, with similar encouragement and loving messages, however in different paper and handwriting. He at first is confused by the first one, with just the slightest hint of a smile, then reads the others and it conflicted and lost. Black out, sound of school bell and bus. 

    The boy is walking back home and he gets in, seeing his mom asleep on the couch. He sees in her hand, a piece of paper with another note written down, he sees more on the floor and the coffee table, each with his brother’s name getting bigger and bigger, until there is one with just his name, written softy. 

He stumbles backwards, overwhelmed, clutching them and starts having memories of his brother flood back. A family picture sits on the mantle, zoom in on that or something.

FLASH He see his brother chasing after him in a game of tag FLASH back to boy running to his room FLASH his brother playfully tickling him to the floor FLASH he falls back against the door FLASH brother, Mom, and boy laughing and talking during a movie CUT him watching and looking up to his brother playing soccer, his mom with him, happy and pointing out the brother CUT family game night, boy wins and the mom and brother go WOOAAHH  CUT the boy crying and hugging his mom, her comforting him but looking off CUT the boy knocking on the moms door asking for her CUT mom drunk, cussing out the boy for doing the dishes wrong (FAST CUTS)

Black out.

    Opens again with an over the shoulder the mom shaking him yelling his name with genuine concern. He looks her her, tears on his face, we see the mother’s whole face for the first time, she looks down and sees him clutching the notes. She looks at him with a frozen expression, feeling caught and vulnerable, ashamed for letting him see her writing these notes. He rises and wraps his arms around her, “i miss him mom” with a sob. Her face softens and she hugs him back “Me too honey. I’m sorry.”

Two shot of the two on the floor, camera slowly zooms out and then fades to black.



After I wrote this I asked my teacher to review this, and she liked it, however she said that before the flashing sequence I should put some sort of visual of the brother.

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